This week for writing we watched an animation called powerless.
We had a criteria for level 3 writing. This is the criteria;
Use a very short sentence.
Start your sentence with an AAWWUBBIS (Opener sentence)
Ly start – Start a sentence with a ly adverb.
Em – dash. A dash is used to set off information in a sentence with dramatic flair.
The subject sentence. Start your sentence with the subject. (Interrupter)
The colours is a key for the writing
I used this criteria to create this piece of writing so here's mine;
When night reaches a small unstable house surrounded by large pine trees, tiny strange looking fairies lurking in the trees creep out into the dark.
When one fairy reaches the house, it begins to see an old rustic robot in front of an old man. He quickly flew through the twisted chimney and into the intake pipe on top of the head. The eyes awakened. They began to turn a bright green and the gears and gauges sprang into life. It only wanted one thing. To save its friend.
The aged robot crept out of the door and into the woods. As the old door creaked, the old man woke up and noticed the door was open. The robot continued to, slowly step by step, walk into the woods. There the old man found the robot trying and trying hard to pull a large log up. Under the log, he found a red fairy struggling to get out. The old man quickly ran to the log and pulled as well. When they eventually pulled the log over, the green fairy flew back out of the intake pipe and started to fly away.The old man then started to walk away - disappointed, colourless. The fairies soon noticed and felt sad. They can see how hard he worked on the useless machine. He only wanted one thing. A power source. And that was what the fairies did. Suddenly they span around in a circle creating bright blue sparkles. Now the robot was alive…